Paper Revision

My paper would need to have some more information and also I would need to have a thesis. My paragraphs are okay but I think it should be in order more as far as changing from one detail to another. I gave a lot of information and details but I should probably change it all around and plan out what I want to say in each paragraph. There is alot of sources on Fish Farming I could use alittle more information and make the topic more wide. The paper might be a little too short as well so ill need to make it longer but better as in planning out what I want to write. The conclusion could be better it could use a better ending. I need to take a side on my paper and explain am I for or against Fish Farming that would outline it more so I could have a better explanation of how to make it better from there on. Theres a lot of research I could use so I would need to research some more on fish Farming. I could look up how it’s done and how does the process of the Fish work. The better you understand your topic the more you can put into details the causes and effects.

Fish Farming research

My Research is on Fish Farming
Heres a couple links:
http://www.huffingtonpost.com/2010/03/31/9-surprising-fish-farming_n_518724.html

http://www.edf.org/page.cfm?tagID=16150

These links basically are on Fish Farming and how its operated everyday, it also gives some facts on how some people rely on fish as a main source of protein for them. Theres also some photos.